tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post5599150170762071184..comments2024-01-24T11:57:22.116-06:00Comments on Jeanette Levellie: Hope Splashes : Pitch for a Prize: Win a Novel!Jeanette Levelliehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/12898750484193832082noreply@blogger.comBlogger18125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-23879674127155789032011-07-21T08:11:41.949-05:002011-07-21T08:11:41.949-05:00Jen, I hardly feel qualified to give you advice as...Jen, I hardly feel qualified to give you advice as this is totally outside my realm of experience. You have a good thing here, I do know that. What I can do is pray for the Lord to guide you in your preparation and then, of course, in the presentation.<br /><br />Love you!Rhonda Schrockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05512423397478708632noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-18853412340472326672011-07-19T12:03:15.426-05:002011-07-19T12:03:15.426-05:00Jen- I think you might be backing into your pitch ...Jen- I think you might be backing into your pitch somewhat. I'd jump right in with the title and topic. You're also not telling me why this book of prayers is different from other books of prayers I can find at Amazon.com or B&N right now. What's unique about it? How does it stand out from the crowd? Why would I pick this book off a shelf crowded with prayer books?<br /><br />You're pitch is lovely and well written (though long), but I think editors and agents are really going to need you to persuade them that you have something NEW to say through prayer. <br /><br />Good luck!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-40285319208542278082011-07-19T11:36:16.429-05:002011-07-19T11:36:16.429-05:00Jen, this sounds like a wonderful book! I hope you...Jen, this sounds like a wonderful book! I hope you find the ideal champion for it at the conference, and have a wonderful time there, too.<br /><br />If I were listening to your pitch I would want to know four things right off the top: what the book is, what it's about (what makes it unique), who the target audience is, and why you're qualified to write it. I'd need to hear those things quickly, before my eyes glaze over and I tune out the rest of the presentation. I think you'd be smart to whittle your pitch down by half, to no more than two or three pithy paragraphs and save the rest of the info to use if there is subsequent discussion. <br /><br />We'll be looking forward to hearing all about the conference and your experiences!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-14058183960904887362011-07-18T22:05:36.565-05:002011-07-18T22:05:36.565-05:00Yes girl, I need a prayer or twenty! Good luck wit...Yes girl, I need a prayer or twenty! Good luck with your pitch. I'm not the greatest at them.Tanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10518718614911804428noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-71565248276054038032011-07-18T19:46:18.168-05:002011-07-18T19:46:18.168-05:00Hi Jen -
You know I'm already a fan of your w...Hi Jen -<br /><br />You know I'm already a fan of your writing. :)<br /><br />This strikes me more as a one sheet than a pitch. I've always been taught a pitch consists of 2 or 3 sentences. <br /><br />Since this is a weak spot for me, I wouldn't attempt to whittle it down to that length. Hmm, maybe we could brainstorm both our pitches together. Usually, I hand editors/agents a one sheet and then crawl under the table. LOL!<br /><br />Blessings,<br />Susan :)Susan J. Reinhardthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07461276857852409546noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-22615869204463507752011-07-18T16:12:40.854-05:002011-07-18T16:12:40.854-05:00I think it is wonderful! I want this book. I think...I think it is wonderful! I want this book. I think I NEED this book! :)<br /><br />I agree with some of the other comments, it probably can be tightened some to be more efficient. Will see if I can't look at it more closely after dinner and get back to you. :) <br /><br />Hugs and blessings,<br />KarenKaren Langehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18177923284595298347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-9669746365737618282011-07-18T11:15:53.845-05:002011-07-18T11:15:53.845-05:00I think it's great.....Your smile will convey ...I think it's great.....Your smile will convey so much of what you are saying......I want to read to it.......Nancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05977147960900342156noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-51202802943962200672011-07-18T09:55:39.244-05:002011-07-18T09:55:39.244-05:00Jeanette, I've never pitched before, but it se...Jeanette, I've never pitched before, but it seems to me like you could pull out one or two of the paragraphs you've written there and use them as a verbal pitch. I know you don't have much time and this seems like a lot. Each paragraph states a lot of the same things in a different way. They're all good, but if you just take a few out, I think you'll do great! <br /><br />"When You Need a Prayer speaks to Christian women in crisis needing reassurance of a God interested in their deepest hurts." <br /><br />Just this one line says so much.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08616276555920544920noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-89453023882626612952011-07-17T14:01:52.095-05:002011-07-17T14:01:52.095-05:00Quietspirit: It's a verbal pitch with an edito...Quietspirit: It's a verbal pitch with an editor, not an elevator pitch, but I think you may be right-it could be a bit long for someone to sit and listen to, after hearing pitches all day long for two or three days!Jeanette Levelliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12898750484193832082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-75302453931743269582011-07-16T20:45:55.409-05:002011-07-16T20:45:55.409-05:00Jeanette:
Your book title needs to be italicized
...Jeanette:<br /> Your book title needs to be <i>italicized</i><br /><br />How much time do you have? I think this is too long for an elevator pitch. Read this aloud and time yourself. You might want to pare it down a bit.quietspirithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06086016141181470311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-88932113214766206152011-07-16T20:04:36.996-05:002011-07-16T20:04:36.996-05:00Thank you for your kindness and support, everyone....Thank you for your kindness and support, everyone. <br /><br />Susan, I had no idea you were attending the Philly conference! Hallelujah! I'll be praying for you, too!! Can't wait to meet you in person!!!Jeanette Levelliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12898750484193832082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-25141835450564161402011-07-16T19:27:39.844-05:002011-07-16T19:27:39.844-05:00Jeanette,
This book sounds awesome. I want to buy ...Jeanette,<br />This book sounds awesome. I want to buy it!! ;D<br />You shared effectively both your audience and concept.<br />I'm looking forward to spending some time with you at the Philly conference. I'll be praying for your appointments. <br />SusanNorth Jersey Christian Writers Grouphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03981039468686243008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-21814018199035837692011-07-16T13:03:35.098-05:002011-07-16T13:03:35.098-05:00I like the dare part. That's so right on. Gr...I like the dare part. That's so right on. Great work, Jeanette.Nancyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15163662759281341381noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-42608468582757144932011-07-16T00:07:45.027-05:002011-07-16T00:07:45.027-05:00I really like how you included how your readers wi...I really like how you included how your readers will benefit from your book. To me, you have not missed anything. I wish I could hear your voice that will give it all the punch it needs!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-5691499531128182032011-07-15T12:21:52.882-05:002011-07-15T12:21:52.882-05:00Oh wow-- I love it already!! Love your description...Oh wow-- I love it already!! Love your descriptions and who it is for and how it can be used!!!Terri Tiffanyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07771622379178654235noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-71583001299615200482011-07-15T11:18:23.402-05:002011-07-15T11:18:23.402-05:00Sorry, Jeannette. I wondered...but then decided it...Sorry, Jeannette. I wondered...but then decided it "sounded" more like a written summation. However, given it's a verbal presentation, your perky personality should carry you!Rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08740950362293427086noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-87604384691235446892011-07-15T11:03:13.741-05:002011-07-15T11:03:13.741-05:00Thanks, Rebecca!
This is a verbal pitch, so the p...Thanks, Rebecca!<br /><br />This is a verbal pitch, so the punctuation won't count. But I appreciate your input for future reference. <br /><br />Blessings, <br />JenJeanette Levelliehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12898750484193832082noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-2081925465275931199.post-10174535828249470922011-07-15T10:26:51.485-05:002011-07-15T10:26:51.485-05:00This comment has been removed by the author.Rebeccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08740950362293427086noreply@blogger.com